What a wonderful thing to have the opportunity of visiting Italy for two weeks. It would be the best holiday I have ever had. Breathing sweet Mediteranean air, listening romantic music, eating healthy olive oiled meals, pizzas, spaghetty… What I like best is associated with Italy. I think in Italy you can see the best examples of art and it is a country full of historical places where you can like the history and understand it better. Also Italian culture is close to our culture, maybe that has an effect on my interest of Italy. But everything that can make me happy is there; sea, historical places, wonderful architecture, cultural events like Istanbul in Turkey. It is a country where you can live nostalgy and modern life at the same time.
Italy is my dream country so everything associated with Italy makes me feel happy. Eating pizza or spaghetti, wearing clothes of Italian companies and watching a movie about Italy. Italian culture is related to our culture at some degree but it’s being ancient and modern at the same time is really great. So a visit to Italy means feeling both nostalgy and modernism at the same time. I would like to do shopping in modern shopping malls surrounded with relics of a great culture.
Italy’s being a culture center also effects my choice. You can see great buildings of arts by worldwide known architects. You can see great paintings in museums and attend enjoyable festivals like Lily Festival. Exactly it is a counrty where you can feel the diference. It is a center of romantism I think love is different in Italy.
Also it’s climate and surroundings make it charming. Warm Mediterranean climate makes a holiday much more better. And having a tour on a boat on a lake which is surrounded by colourful flowers is something that can make you forget all of your problems and love the life.
Italian cuisine is another reason that attracts me. Healthy olive oiled meals, original pizzas and home made spaghetties. It would be much more different and tasty to eat all these in there.
In conclusion there are lots of motives that make me have a desire to visit Italy. It is with climate, surrounding, people, cuisine shortly as a whole a charming place for me. I am sure in there I would forget all about boredom of life and seize the day.
I think your essay is very successful in terms of coherence and unity. Your examples are quite supporting and clear. They enriched your topic. Your introduction part includes more than it requires. You can mention the subjects of your essay in the introduction part briefly and then you can clarify them in body paragraphes. Thus, you can avoid repeatations of your examples. Your conclusion part supports and paraphrases your thesis statement. All in all, Your essay is well developed, I like it.
YanıtlaSilI think your essay is successful. But you repeated the examples a few times, that's why I feel a bit bored. Your introduction part is well organized and thesis statement is clear.There is unity and coherence in your essay and topic sentences support the thesis statement. Also you summarised your essay in conclusion part and it is well organized, I think. the last thing Iwant to say is that I really love Italy,too. I hope one day we have opportunity to go there. :)
YanıtlaSilFirst of all, it seems that the introduction part is the longest part of your essay. Be careful about it, because it may make your reader bored. Moreover, you mentioned all the topic sentences in your introduction but instead of writing long descriptions about them, it could have been better just mentioning their names in phrases. Finally, there is problem about the coherence, I think. Because, you mentioned about the food in the second paragraph, and then two different issues in the following paragragh but you returned to the issue of food in the fourth paragraph. These should have been in a logical order.
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